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nod32 2010-7-7 12:47

增強英語四六級寫作語句表現力的有效方法

<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">縱觀多年來國家四、六級英語(論壇)作文考試,考生作文成績欠佳的主要原因除了準確性和連貫性差之外,語句軟弱無力也是不容忽略的一個方面。因此在英語寫作教學中,如何增強語句表現力的問題必須引起我們足夠的重視,以提高學生寫作的表達質量。為此,筆者結合自己的寫作教學實踐,針對該項技能的訓練提出了一些切實可行的有效做法,供廣大同仁和英語學習者參考借鑒。</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left"><STRONG>一、避免使用語意弱的「be」動詞。</STRONG></P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1、把句中的表語轉換為不同的修飾語。例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (轉換為前置定語)</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (轉換為並列結構作後置定語)</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2、將作表語用的形容詞或名詞變為行為動詞。例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1) Weak: The team members are good players.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Revision: The team members play well.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2) Weak: One worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Revision: One worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">3、在以「here」或「there」開頭的句子中,把「be」動詞後的名詞代詞變成改寫句的主語。例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left"><STRONG>二、多用語意具體的動詞,保持句意簡潔明瞭。</STRONG>例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Better: She compares prices and quality.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left"><STRONG>三、盡量運用主動語態。</STRONG>例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Better: Charity has supported the organization.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left"><STRONG>四、防止使用語意冗長累贅的詞語。</STRONG>例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left"><STRONG>五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語或難懂的專業術語。</STRONG>例如:</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.</P>
<P style="TEXT-INDENT: 2em; LINE-HEIGHT: 30px; TEXT-ALIGN: left">Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.</P>

williamat2006 2011-1-5 16:03

good ...very good<br>
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